Error analysis (b) - corrections

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1 Senior managers are away on a training day all day today and tomorrow. Urgent massages can be given to the office staff.

Perhaps this was a typing error - surely it was the messages that needed to be urgent?

2 The Council is delighted to announce that the new Giant Kid's Playground will be opened by the comedian Lenny Henry.

How many children are expected to use this playground? Just the one, who is very large? The Council is delighted to announce that the new Giant Kids' Playground will be opened by the comedian Lenny Henry.

3 Today we remember in prayer the many who are sick of our church and community.

If you are sick of sth (informal) you are bored, annoyed, exasperated, disappointed, and tired of something - especially of something that you have experienced for too long.
As it stands the sentence gives rise to some misunderstanding, as it sounds as if the people are not ill but irritated and fed up (informal) with the church and also with their community.
The sentence needs to read: Today we remember in prayer those of our church and community who are sick.

4 Me and Dave are hoping to spend a few years living in Delhi.

Dave and I are hoping to spend a few years living in Delhi.
The custom is to quote yourself last in a list, and you need the subject pronoun I. You will hear this mistake made quite often in Britain.

5 On the edge of a picturesque village with plenty of shops, hotel owners Jean and Malcolm MacDonald offer guests a warm welcome.

Surely it is not the hotel owners who are on the edge of the village, but their hotel?
Corrected versions could be: Hotel owners Jean and Malcolm MacDonald offer guests a warm welcome at their hotel on the edge of a picturesque village with plenty of shops. Or At their hotel on the edge of a picturesque village with plenty of shops, owners Jean and Malcolm MacDonald offer guests a warm welcome.

6 Residents refuse to be placed in special dustbins.

Without an apostrophe the noun refuse (= rubbish) becomes a verb, so that it is the people, not their rubbish that will be put in the rubbish bins - how right they are to refuse such treatment!

Residents' refuse to be placed in special dustbins.

7 Thirty two year olds make quite a noise when they're enjoying themselves!

How old are these people making a noise? Are they thirty-two? Or two?
Here we need hyphens - Thirty two-year-olds make quite a noise when they're enjoying themselves! or - adults can be noisy too - Thirty-two-year-olds make quite a noise when they're enjoying themselves!

8 WeightWatchers will meet at 7 PM in the church hall. Please use large double door at the side entrance.

There is nothing wrong with this, really! It's just unfortunate that the juxtaposition of the idea of people watching their weight and having to use large double doors to get in for their Weightwatchers' meeting is slightly unfortunate! Perhaps it would have been less ambiguous to write: WeightWatchers will meet at 7 PM in the church hall. Please remember that entry to the church hall for many of our clubs is via the large double door at the side entrance.